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Churches

In the still morning air,
churches rise, stone buttresses,
the bones of saints.  
You finger each of my words,
the click of rosary beads.
Outside our window,
wagons clack, sheets flap,
squares of white, windows to something purer.
We sleep curved around each other,
the cool taste of spoons.
Only there is no longer anything
for us to eat. I slip away from your arms.
You want....
But I can only give you this, a light so clear
we don't have to be who we are.
Purity, desires and identity
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:iconmichel-le-fou:
The analogy of church and saints' bones is keen.in fact, the saints claim, or the founders claim that the saints were, the founding of the church. That is actually religiious fervor and hype. Nonetheless, you chose a good comparison. The incursion of words, probably prayer, and rosary is nice work. I feel sharply that some depth of thought is in this. The private setting that follows was full. Wagons clacking, sheets flapping,spoons and intertwined bodies. No food, only light. Altogether, it was a unique romantic work and presented in a fresh style. And by the way, right! We don'thave to be who we are.
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Concora Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   Writer
Beautiful images. :)
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swansisters Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
'the bones of saints' :heart:
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MineralAccident Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Writer
You had me at "the cool taste of spoons".
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swansisters Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.!!! :D
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Argentum-Lupae-Luna Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely. This was amazing, Swan. Very deep, and the imagery was beautiful.
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swansisters Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I am happy.
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Argentum-Lupae-Luna Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome, love.
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